what do you think about my resume?

[alexm]

hi, my name is alex and i would like to know what do you think about my resume.....may be you can help me finding parts to change or if you would be interesting in reading my resume and give me a job opportunity................



name, addres,telephone numer........





What makes a person different from others is different is that we all have different ideals and principles. My principles always guide me to achieve my goals all material and intellectual, that is why I always fight for what I want without hurting anyone or trample on those who are around me, always remain simple, respectful, friendly and very confident with myself and all who are around me, my short term goals are to start college, find job and buy a new car, my long term goals are to graduate from college and go to the law school.





EMPLOYMENT HISTORY



RADIOSHACK IN adress................................

November 2008 to septembrer 2009

a sales associate i was responsible for helping costumers by giving them a solution to all their needs and concerns, i was also responsible for offering them a neat and clean environment.



*wireless retailer (att,sprint,t-mobile)

*sales (by person and phone)

*stock person

*costumer care



EDUCATION



High School diploma at:

Memorial High School, adresss................................





SKILLS

Software: Microsoft Office, Excel, Access, internet

Fluent in Spanish

Excellent verbal and communication skills



REWARDS-RECOGNITION & COMMUNITY SERVICE



Volunteered at ?Maria Luisa De Moreno foundation?

Member of soccer team at high school

[JACKEL]

Looks great ! Good luck

[Z111]

Your resume has some errors:

You wrote: "What makes a person different from others is different is that we all have different ideals and principles."

******The above sentence does not make grammatical sense. You use the word 'different' 3 times in one sentence and it is redundant. You could delete the sentence altogether because it also states the obvious, and it is unclear how that statement would convince employers that you would be fit for the job. Replace it with something more coherent."My principles always guide me to achieve my goals all material and intellectual, that is why I always fight for what I want without hurting anyone or trample on those who are around me, always remain simple, respectful, friendly and very confident with myself and all who are around me, my short term goals are to start college, find job and buy a new car, my long term goals are to graduate from college and go to the law school."


****run on paragraph! You have a lot of commas, and it is a sentence that does not seem to end! Break it up. Separate the ideas into separate sentences.


"EMPLOYMENT HISTORY

RADIOSHACK IN adress................................
November 2008 to septembrer 2009
a sales associate i was responsible for helping costumers by giving them a solution to all their needs and concerns, i was also responsible for offering them a neat and clean environment."


****You misspell address and customers. It is another run-on sentence. "I was also responsible" - the "I" should be capitalized and preceded by a semi-colon. "a sales associate i was responsible" is grammatically incoherent. How about "I was a sales associate and was responsible for.....""*wireless retailer (att,sprint,t-mobile)
*sales (by person and phone)
*stock person
*costumer care"

*****You misspell customer again. You didn't put a space after your comma before T-Mobile. Capitalize both businesses. It will look more professional."EDUCATION

High School diploma at:
Memorial High School, adresss................................"


*****Address is misspelled. Even though that word won't be on your resume, you really need to use spell-check. "SKILLS
Software: Microsoft Office, Excel, Access, internet
Fluent in Spanish
Excellent verbal and communication skills

REWARDS-RECOGNITION & COMMUNITY SERVICE

Volunteered at ?Maria Luisa De Moreno foundation?
Member of soccer team at high school"


*****Your formatting needs to be more professional. Go to your local college or community college and see if you can find help in printing out your resume in a polished format.

Good luck!

[BridgetB]

Hi,

Your resume has many typing errors in it. Also, you should change your objective so that it more clearly states what you want to do.